(A Red Writing Hood prompt.)
The house is busy and full of sound
There’s bustling all around
Inside and outside, there’s commotion
All around her, there’s motion.
But she’s sitting still barely aware
Not a moment does she spare
For the occupants of her little world
There she sits, behold.
Mesmerized by the glow of the screen
As if nothing else could be seen
And the sound of laughter
Drowned out by the keyboard’s chatter.
And all that’s happening
In her subconscious is tapping
Furiously fighting
For attention.
Sloth: When we don’t do what we should be doing.
Woohoo – Poetry! I love poetry and I loved this post. The internet has got to be the largest generator of sloth EVER…so says the woman who's on the internet instead of her exercise bike! LOL
Thanks! I didn't think about all the other people out there who might have been in the same position as me. LOL. I was just totally feeling guilty yesterday. =)
Lovely poem! I really enjoyed this piece. Saying it all in very few words AND in rhyme. Well done!
Thank you. I'm a simple poet. I like to rhyme. =)
You've been to my home, yes? So well done. I so can relate.
I was totally "relating" yesterday! That's why I was so inspired to write it. Needless to say, I turned off the computer immediately after writing and posting the link!
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Ah yes, I get this. Life just keeps on happening, calling, doesn't it? {Thank goodness!}
I love that you chose poetry to draw this out. Inner workings and all that. Brilliant, really.
Sometimes poetry is the best way to say something important with very little words.
I was concerned about the word limit too much, so I reverted to poetry! hahaha
Glad you liked it!
"furiously fighting for attention" yep. nailed it.
That's what it felt like at the time! hahaha
I'm in awe of your poetic ability. You were able to tell the story through it. Excellent use of the prompt!
It's amateur at best, but thank you for the compliment. =D
poetry is certainly therapy for me, and i can relate to being frozen in my thoughts, unable to pull myself away to take care of the day to day
poetry IS therapy when words flow so easily. but when u get a mental block, poetry IS insanity! (does your blog have an RSS feed?)
Ooh! A poem! I'm all sorts of impressed, and it was really well-done and fun! Wait – does that rhyme? Eek!
@mommypants Thanks! You don't do so bad yourself, rhyming and all. heeheehee
Cute poem! At first I thought it was going to be about someone watching the telly. Now I feel a little bad about blogging…
That's exactly how I felt! =D
I like the juxtaposition of sitting silently in front of a computer screen and your subconscious fighting furiously for attention. I really enjoyed this!
@Ixy thank u. i think sometimes people who look like they're doing nothing are actually actively doing something in their head. you know what I mean?
I'm always so impressed with people who can write poetry. This was fantastic!
Thank you very much. I liked your fiction post about sloth on ur blog. Made me want to know what happened next!
dammit…now you have made me so guilty about reading all those Red Dress Club linkups :p
LOL. Sorry. I make myself feel guilty everytime I revisit this post too!
Wow. I love how "fast" that reads…I could feel the motion swirling around.
Funny you said that, considering it was about being slow to do anything (or not doing anything). I didn't think my poem was that deep. LOL. But hey, it works!
Great job on that one:)
Thanks! Guilty feelings sometimes inspire me to confess. =D